PWM bread boarded with no glitches. Video on you tube, 100 0057 Bernard.
Values used: C 1 = 100 uF, R 1-2 = 15k, ( R 1 not used ), R 3 = 3k9, C 2 = 1 uF, R 4 = 1 k.
Q 1-2 not used, U 3-7 to gate of Q3, N ch. FET SM, 3055V. LED,s aquablue, 5 mm, 2.4 Vf, R's 3k9.
Connected U 1 & U 2 one at a time & checked before connecting to comparator, Grounded LED cathodes to be sure that all came on, connected FET & tested - gate grounded, LED's off, gate + 12 V- all LEDs on. Connected gate to U3-7 & tested- LED's pulsing going full on & full off. Connected 100 k pot. to + & -, ct. to U 1- 5, raised pin 5 from 8 V to where LED's just stayed on at minimum brightness.

I did redraw it so that I could see the numbers, threw in some changes to match video.View attachment 106982
What comparator are you using, your print shows LM339, should be LM393, dual, just a typo ?
No power to comparator.
when grounding unused inputs do you ground both + & -?Page 4, post 76 shows LM339, pick one of the 4, ground inputs to unused .
I ground all unused inputs including + & - of comparators. My guess is that there is a 90% chance that a comparator would be stable with only one input grounded, but maybe a better choice might be to ground one input & tie other high.

Schematic in post # 292 looks good. Do not make modifications until basic circuit is working, U1-5 no connection, save pot for testing.
Ground U3-2, output, and see if LEDs are off.
Temp. disconnect U3-4, - input, connect pot wiper to U3-4, & adjust to 6 V. LEDs should blink on & off at slow clock rate, about 2 sec. on, 2 sec. off. Look at Stream # 19, substitute a straight 6 V for fast clock, whenever red line is above 6V, LEDs are on.
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Progress ?
Varying the pot should not change the pulse rate, just % time that LEDs are on, duty cycle; with pot below 4V (VCC 12 V ) LEDs should be on solid, 100 % duty cycle. Raise pot slowly, LED on time should shrink; pot above 8 V, LEDs off = 0 % duty cycle.
Re connect every thing. Disconnect lead from U3-5 ,+, connect pot to U3-5; pot low, LEDs should be off; slowly raise pot , LEDs should get brighter & above 8 V should be full on. No? Can you listen with hi Z earphones or such to U2 ( labeled U1 ) -3, should be loud 200 Hz +/_ . No ? bad or reversed C2, bad 555 ?. bad connection.